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Pony POV Series

Dark World Drabbles

Questions Questions

By Kendell2


Hi! I’m Inquisition and-why are you the one doing this, Gilda?

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Dash said she was busy interviewing Scoots and Diamond, no clue why she chose me though.)

Well, you’re a Griffin, I’m a Hippogriff! Maybe that’s why?

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): I don’t know, kid. And I’m supposed to be asking the questions.)

Oh! Right! Well, I’m Inquisition! I’m a Hippogriff and I live in Cloudsdale! Why do I have to say I’m a Hippogriff? Won’t everycreature know that?

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Don’t know, I’m just doing what Dash asked me to.)

Okay! My special talent is trying to figure stuff out and asking questions! Miss Applejack says it’s ‘looking for the truth’ and that’s why I’m the new Element of Honesty! She’s really nice! She was the only member of Ruby Pineapple Discord’s Chaos Six momma said wasn’t bad! But she wasn’t really right, well, she kinda was but wasn’t. She was right they could hurt me but wrong that they were-

(Interviewer’s Notes Gilda): Whao! Slow down a little, kid!)

Why?

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Because I can’t write very fast! I haven’t written anything in a thousand years!)

Okay!…Mom…said…I…needed…to…

(Interviewer’s notes (Gilda): Not that slow!)

Sorry…How slow then?

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Uh…I guess about twenty percent slower than you were going.)

Okay!

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): …You actually understood that?)

Yep! I asked Rainbow Dash about it! I think it’s really really really cool you invented a coolness scale!

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Hehe…thanks kid. So you were sayin‘?)

I guess I should start when I first met Rainbow Dash, or Traitor Dash as I knew her back then.

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Ugh, could that loser have come up with lamer names for those six! Betrayer Dash would’ve sound at least five percent cooler!)

Why?

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): I don’t know…just does…Not that anything could make all the horseapples that jerk made ‘em do cool.)

Why do you say horseapples? I thought Hippogriffs and Griffins used droppings.

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Because I…Kid, I’m the one interviewing you here! Let me ask the questions!)

Sorry…

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Ugh…sorry, I’m the Element of Anger for a reason and I promised Dash I‘d try to get better at it. Just try to keep this about you, okay? I want to save some material for when I’m getting interviewed.)

Alright, I’m sorry for getting sidetracked Gilda…just I like to learn things…

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Gotcha. Just keep going, alright?)

Okay!

Before she had to kill Mrs Storm-Cracker, me and her got to talk…she didn’t seem like a big scary monster, she just seemed like everycreature else. She seemed nice. Even when she started telling what Cheese Scepter Discord was saying…she didn’t seem like a monster to me. Even when she killed Storm-Cracker, I was terrified, I did try to stand up for Storm-Cracker, I WAS mad at Traitor Dash for killing her but I couldn’t see Traitor Dash as just a monster…

Momma wasn’t happy about what happened though.

“Inquisition! You could have been killed! Don’t scare me like that ever again!”

“But I didn’t know…”

Momma gave a sigh and took a deep breath. “…I know…I’m sorry I didn‘t warn you about her…it’s just if it’d been the boogeymare you’d be in her playroom right now…”

I didn’t know who Traitor Dash was, but everycreature knew who the boogeymare was. That’s what we called Fluttercruel. One of the things…

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): …Sweet Celestia…)

What’s wrong?

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Just I knew her…mom, I think Dash said, back a thousand years ago…I was kinda a jerk to her, but tryin’ to imagine that body as some kind of serial killer is still hard for me to wrap my head around.)

What was her momma like?

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): A total wallflower and I thought she was a total wimp…Boy did I stick by claws in my mouth, how was I supposed to know she was the freakin’ Element of Kindness?!…Ugh…Kiddo, please take off your Element…)

Oh! Sorry! I don‘t quite have the hang of my powers yet!

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): …It’s fine kid, I’m still getting used to how mine work too…Ow! And yes, Eden, I’m sorry I keep breaking your bucking doors! …Ugh…let’s just get back to the story.)

Well, mom was so worried about me…but even after that I couldn’t help wondering. I couldn’t help thinking Traitor Dash wasn’t really a monster.

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Uh, kid, she just murdered somegriff in front of you. I‘d probably have thought she was a monster.)

But Oversized Hat Discord made lots of good creatures do things they really, really, really, REALLY didn’t want to do! It was one of his favorite games.

(Interviewer's Notes (Gilda): Kid, just to be the Draconequus' advocate here, Dash keeps sayin' she wasn't magically forced to do anything.)

But that's just it! If he didn’t have to Discord a pony to make them do it? He seemed to have even more fun doing it, or I thought he did and that's what the grownups kept telling me. That’s what all the grownups always told me: ‘don’t blame them for it, Inquisition, Ugly Painting Discord made them do it.’ I was supposed to forgive them for what he made them do. I wasn’t supposed to say they were monsters, they were his victims…

But I couldn’t help wondering why were the Chaos Six so different? Why did everycreature treat them like monsters, but when some other nice giff started acting mean or nasty, somepony always said ‘Discord must have gotten to them?’ Momma was too upset about me and Traitor Dash for me to ask…

“It’s just how it is, Inquisition.”

“They’re different than those two.”

“They’re just rotten ponies, nothing else about it.”

All the same thing, that is was just ‘how things were’ or they were ‘different’…but none of those answers worked for me. I just couldn’t help asking questions about it…

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): I think they mighta been dumbin’ things down for ya kid.)

Maybe…and maybe I'm making it simpler than it was…but it still wasn’t enough.

Then things changed. First the sky got really REALLY weird looking! It was half day and half night! No creature knew she that was! It was kinda scary, but we still could just say ‘Meat Top Hat Discord did it’…Until something else happened…




“What?!” momma asked, taking a trot back.

“The Apple Pies and Diamond Dogs said that Twilight Tragedy, Liarjack, and Rarigreed have turned on President of the Boogie Discord,” Horus said, panting from flying all the way over to our house.

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): HAHAHA!)

What is it?

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Uh…Nothing…you’d have to be over a thousand years old to get it…Keep going.)

Momma seemed too stunned to talk…so I did.

“Mr. Horus?” I asked, coming up to him.

“Yes, Inquisition?”

“…Why do they say they turned on him?”

Horus rubbed his head. “Well…from what the Apple Pies and Diamond Dogs said, the Chaos Six used to be heroes until Twisted Pencil Discord got his claws in ‘em…Apparently they’ve been Discorded all this time and those three broke loose, or that‘s what they‘ve been saying…”

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Let me guess, you’d asked the guy about it before?)

Yeah. I think that was why he was looking at me all weird, like he wasn‘t sure what to say.

“So now what?” momma asked finally. “Assuming they’re not lying.”

“Well…apparently they’ve got some kind of secret weapon they’re going to try and defeat Tinfoil Shorts Discord with.”

“What?! Defeat HIM?!” asked momma. She laughed. “You expect me to believe that three of Discord’s Chaos Six have turned on him and are going to try and defeat the maniac that we’ve spent our entire lives trying our hardest to resist? You’re joking!”

“…Why can’t it be true, momma?”

Momma looked at me. “Inquisition…you saw Traitor Dash kill Storm-Cracker! Those three are monsters!”

“…Why are they monsters?”

“Because they serve the tyrant! They kill ponies!”

“Why are they different from Berserk Claw or Gilded Talon?”

Those two were Hippogriffs that Fried Carrot Discord got his claws in Berserk was Discorded to go berserk and had to be put down. Gilded Talon had to sit alone in his house all the time because everything he touched turned to gold except sardines which he hated, but it was all he could eat. I felt bad for him cause sardines smell yucky!

“Because they’re different!” momma said, but she looked confused.

“How are they different?”

"Because they weren't a sadistic monster, they didn't takes chicks and turn them into monsters, they didn't steal souls to add to their collection, they didn't obey Clockwork Orange Discord like they were a machine, they didn't kill someone, apologize, kill someone, apologize, over and over and OVER and never once actually CHANGE what they were doing! And because they haven’t been doing it for a thousand years!”

“But hasn’t he made ponies and griffs do stuff just as bad before? Why do we call them victims but the Chaos Six monsters if Reverse Po-Pole-Polelarity Telescope Discord made them do what they’re doing just like them?”

“…This conversation is over, Inquisition.”

But it wasn’t…first we heard Traitor Dash was free too and then that the Valeyard was gone. We didn’t hear anything for awhile after that…until…

“Horus…what in Cadence‘s name…”

I trotted outside and saw everything start looking really weird! The pink clouds started turning grey and the chocolate milk lost its color and became clear!

“Momma…what’s that?”

Momma carefully put a claw out and caught some of the clear milk on her claw and looked at it closely. She took a step back, eyes wide. “It’s…it’s water…”

“Why is it falling from the sky? And why aren’t the clouds pink anymore?”

“I…I don’t know…I’ve never seen this before…I’d read about it, but…Tacky Tropical Shirt Discord almost never lets it happen…”

Momma had the other griffs take a look at it and they said the same thing. Some dragons who’d been around before Discord called it ‘rain.’ Just rain. Not chocolate milk rain or snail rain or skunk spray rain. Just rain.

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Ugh! It actually got to raining those things?!)

Yeah! I got caught in both on the way home from school they were really REALLY icky! Why didn’t you know? I thought you had been under Micro Cosmos Sword Discord too.

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Yeah, but Dash said the king of all lame-os got about three hundred and ten percent more crazy since I died, guess this was what she was talking about…You were saying?)

We started hearing lots of things had changed! The zombies started disappearing, Discorded creatures were themselves again! It was so weird! Some of the grownups started saying Broken Record Discord had lost, some others just said he was trying something new.

“Momma…do you think they beat him?” I asked, looking up as we watched the rain out our window.

“Honey…I don’t know…I don’t know anymore…” she said. It…it’s kinda scary when the grown ups don’t know what’s going on…even when not a lot made sense as it was.  They could always say ‘Paper Pirate Hat Discord did it’ or something. It normally wasn‘t enough for me, but it was something…momma didn’t know at what to think or what to say…I started to feel scared…

She hugged me.

…Then everything got REALLY weird when Miss Rarity turned into Queen Libra! The ground down below became green! It’d never been green before!

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Your weird is my normal kid.)

Yeah, I know! Apple Pie thinks that’s really funny!

Then Traitor Dash was back in Cloudsdale again, but she wasn’t grey anymore! She was actually really pretty! And…she wasn’t a bad guy anymore…

“Please…you have to believe us,” she said. “I know we’ve caused a lot of death and pain…I know last time…last time I was here I killed someone…but I only did that because Discord told me he’d destroy Cloudsdale if I didn’t…he lied to me, and I killed Storm-Cracker for nothing…I know that doesn’t make it right, but I’m sorry…I’m so sorry…that’s all I can say…I’m not asking you to excuse the inexcusable, I’m…I just want you to know, we’re not your enemies anymore. Please accept that I’m sorry.”

And she cried. That was…weird. Yeah, she'd cried before, but this was different. This wasn't a few tears, it was her crying her eyes out! She just looked so...broken. Even if I’d been wondering if she was a monster or not…it was still something I never thought I’d see.

Momma didn’t react. She just locked up. I think everygriff did.

I looked at Traitor Dash. She looked so hurt, so guilty…And she was the only one who could answer the questions I’d wanted to get a real answer to for all this time, and I wanted them really really REALLY bad!…And the grownups always said if Tyrant of Rock and Roll Discord let anypony out of his control to be nice to them because they‘d need it.

“Big Banana Discord lied to you?” I asked, peeking through the bigger Hippogriffs.

Momma gasped but didn’t do anything, I think she wanted to know as much as I did.

“Yeah…for the last thousand years…he lied so I’d think I was doing the right thing…I didn’t think I had a choice…” she said, but she didn’t look at me.

“So he hurt you just like everybody else?”

She looked up at me. She was still crying.

“Yeah…I guess so…”

I looked close into her eyes…She looked so hurt and guilty…It made me want to cry!

“…I believe you, Traitor Dash,” I said, giving her a smile. I just felt like if any creature needed a smile right then…it was her.

She cringed, but then she smiled. “Actually, it’s Rainbow Dash now.”

It took awhile, but some other Hippogriffs felt the same way I did and more believed it once Queen Libra broke Sand Castle King Discord’s spell on Gilded Talon! It was so sweet to see him finally hug his mate again! And Queen Libra was so pretty!

Momma even let me talk to Rainbow Dash a bit! Though she was right there ready to grab me if she had to. I think she wanted to know more just like I did.

“Kid…why…why did you believe me?”

I gave her a smile. “Because momma always told me that if a pony does something bad because Lord of the Messy Room Discord made them do it, I shouldn’t hate them for it! That I should forgive them! And I forgive you, Tra-I mean Rainbow Dash!”

She started crying again, but this time she was smiling. “Your…your mom is a smart Hippogriff.”

Momma actually smiled!

She and momma talked alone later, I don’t know what it was but I know Rainbow Dash said ‘I’m sorry’ a lot.

And I met Apple Pie too! It was her first time ever being in Cloudsdale!

“So your name is Apple Pie?” I asked.

“Yep! That’s mah name!”

“But your family is named Apple Pie, right?”

“Yep!”

“How do you tell the difference?”

She laughed. “It gets confusin’ from time to time, but that makes it fun!”

I couldn’t help laughing to! I really really like Apple Pie! She never gets angry when I ask questions and she’s so funny! We’re really good friends now!

And when me and momma went home that night (it was so weird for day and night to be so long!), momma tucked me in…

“Inquisition…you were right…”

I cocked my head. “What do you mean momma?”

“…I guess I’m too old to keep an open mind even in this crazy world of ours…I’ve been bitter at those six for a long time…ever since your father died…”

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Wait wait wait, Horus isn’t your dad?)

No, he’s momma’s friend. My papa died when I was really little…momma didn’t want to talk about it too much…I missed him a lot…

“…I hated them too much to think they could be victims like everycreature else…I guess sometimes the eyes of a child can be clearer than an adult’s…You were right, Inquisition…You’re a smart girl, I’m proud of you…”

She kissed me on the head and nuzzled me.

And then…and then Queen Libra’s wedding came and…and

“Inquisition!”

“P-papa? Is it really you? You’re not a zombie?”

“No, Inquistion, it’s me, I‘m back!”

Papa came back! He came back! I have my papa back! Momma was so happy!

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): I’m happy for ya kid.)

Thanks! I’m so happy! And now he has pretty crystal eyes!

And everything just kept getting better! Storm-Cracker came back too! The Wedding was so cool! And then Rainbow Dash, you, and Scootaloo started the Wonderbolts up again! You three are so awesome!

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Of course we’re awesome! I can’t wait to show these la…everycreature what real flying is!)

I really hope I can be a Wonderbolt when I get bigger!

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Try hard and you might be almost as awesome as me and Dash…only a lame-o gives up on their dreams.)

…Could you teach me some tricks, Gilda?

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Huh?! Me?!)

Rainbow can’t teach me to fly like a Griffin…and you’re my friend too. Please?

(Interviewer‘s Notes (Gilda) Dang it, where did you learn puppy dog eyes?!…Well…I guess I could…after we’re done here…)

Thankyouthankyouthankyou!

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Ah! Okay okay! You’re welcome kid! Enough with the hugging!)

Sorry…

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda):…It’s okay…I’m just not used to fillies…chicks…filly-chicks hugging me…or anycreature hugging me…)

Did you like it?

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): …)

Why aren’t you saying anything and blushing a little?

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Talk about Grogar.)

Oh, okay…Well not long before it, I heard Rainbow Dash and momma talking but I didn't know about what. And not long Grogar came back and started foalnapping every foal…chick…Huh, so that’s why that confuses everycreature from a thousand years ago!

He foalnapped me too! It was really scary! I didn‘t know what was going on! I was just suddenly in a really dark and nasty place! It smelled yucky!…But I was in a place I’d never been before! And well…

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): You’re you?)

Yeah!

“Why do you disappear for a thousand years? Why not two years or two thousand?” I asked the half an Earth Pony that was guarding us.

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Jacka-I mean Donkey.)

Donkey! Yeah! That was it! I asked him.

“Because that’s how long it takes for Lord Grogar to get us back,” he replied, sounding really bored. He blinked. “Why did I answer that?”

“I don’t know! But why does it take that long?”

He didn’t answer that time.

“Pst! Hippogriff!” whispered an Earth Pony filly beside me.

“Apple Pie? Is that you?”

“Nah, that’s mah twin sister, Ah’m Poison Apple. Keep talkin’ tah him, Ah need yah tah buy meh some time tah get us out of here,” she told me.

“How?”

“That’s a secret, don‘t want him tah hear.”

I looked back to the donkey and kept asking him the same question over and over.

“Because that’s how long it takes him to recreate his bell!” he finally yelled, seeming really really angry now.

“Really? Why?”

“I don’t know!”

“Why?”

“Because he won’t tell me!“

“Why?”

And I kept asking him questions. Momma says I shouldn’t keep asking questions when somecreature doesn’t want to answer them or keep asking why because it‘s impolite (I kinda broke that rule before the Chaos Six I guess…), but Poison Apple said she needed me to, so I decided to just ask about everything I wanted to know!

“The play says there was a half an Earth Pony like you before, are you him or just related to him?”

“UGH!” he yelled after I asked him a lot of questions and he trotted off holding his hoof to his head. “I need some ice…”

Poison Apple chuckled. “Doesn't take questions well, does he?”

“Hehe, I wonder why. I just really wanted to know stuff!”

She chuckled. “Probably cause they got a lot of secrets to keep. By the way, what‘s yer name?”

“Oh! My name is Inquisition!”

“Oh yeah, Apple Pie mentioned yah. Good tah meet yah, Inquisition.”

And then she mixed up this stuff that melted through the bars to the cell…

“Alright, no more questions,” said the donkey, walking back in with a bag of ice on his head. “Just sit there and be-”

“GET ‘EM!” yelled another foal, who turned out to be Apple Pie and Poison Apple’s big sister Cream Pie.

“AHH!”

And then we all tackled the donkey to the ground and escaped!

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): HAHAHA! The dweeb got beat up by a bunch of little kids?!)

Well Rainbow Dash says creatures are really tough now and there was an entire room of us and one of him, but I guess it was kinda funny!

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Yeah it is, good work kid!)

Thanks. The same thing happened to the bad guy guarding the other cell with kids in it when Diamond Tiara got them out. But we couldn’t beat all of Grogar’s soldiers guarding us, they were too tough for a bunch of kids to take out, and there were too many for Diamond and Bomb Pie to take out all on their own…good thing we had help.

“GIVE ME BACK MY MUFFIN!” yelled Mrs. Derpy, smashing down the door and pouncing on the soldiers.

“Go momma!” yelled a little unicorn foal that’d been with us.

And then we met up with all the others and Rainbow was really happy to see I was okay! So was Scootaloo! You were too, right?

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): …Yeah…I guess I couldn’t have our biggest fan getting hurt, could I?)

Hehe, thanks! But then while we tried to get all us kids to safety, I noticed Rainbow seemed to be looking at me weird while I started talking with everycreature and making friends and when Grogar came after us himself something really cool happened! But I’ll let Miss Aquamarine tell that story! She can probably tell it better than me!

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Alright, so we done here?)

Yep! Unless you’ve got another question, do you?

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Hang on…Ah! How’d you get your Cutie Mark? Forgot that one…)

School!

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): School?)

Yeah! Just asking questions in school! So you can teach me some tricks now?!

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Hehe, sure kid. You know the basics already?)

Yeah! Kinda need to learn to fly when your city could fall out of the sky any minute!

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): 0-0 …And I complained about being the only Griffin chick in a school of Pegasi foals…)
Dark World may be a bad future were Discord won. It may have been saved. But that doesn't mean the heroes' stories are the only ones who deserve to be told.

A little Hippogriff naively approached one of the overlord's enforcers...and then later bravely helped her win the crowd. This is the story of a little Hippogriff named Inquisition.

This one was fun but also challenging. I enjoyed writing from a little child's perspective, but that was also challenging. As was writing the interviewer as still in character but still genuinely showing she was Inquisition's friend, I hope that worked out! 

Any suggestions to either of those goals are welcome!

My Little Pony belongs to Hasbro.

Pony POV Series belongs to :iconalexwarlorn:

EDIT: Added a couple lines to the Grogar portion to better fit into what happened, also added mention of Bomb Pie being present with the foals fighting back.

EDIT: Added a few edits by :iconalexwarlorn: Thanks! And also added a line about her mom talking to Rainbow to foreshadow the reveal about her father.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013
EDIT: Added a couple lines to the Grogar portion to better fit into what happened, also added mention of Bomb Pie being present with the foals fighting back.

What were the lines?
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Kendell2 Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013
(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Talk about Grogar.)

Oh, okay…Well not long before it, I heard Rainbow Dash and momma talking but I didn't know about what. And not long Grogar came back and started foalnapping every foal…chick…Huh, so that’s why that confuses everycreature from a thousand years ago! 

He foalnapped me too! It was really scary! I didn‘t know what was going on! I was just suddenly in a really dark and nasty place! It smelled yucky!…But I was in a place I’d never been before! And well…


BTW, did I do a good job of depicting Inquisition as a CHILD? That was honestly what I was going for.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013
I'm a drawing a blank. Sorry for saying that a lot. I'm distracted. 
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Kendell2 Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013
Considering the time of year, I think we can ALL relate to that.
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013
Even when she killed Storm-Cracker, I was terrified, I did try to stand up for her, but I couldn’t see Tratiro Dash as just a monster…

No offense dude but that ones a little over the top. Seeing a stranger kill a member of your pack and wanting to stand up FOR THEM?! Seriously. That's crazy. People are judged by their actions, not their words.



(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Just I knew her…mom I think Dash said back a thousand years ago…

You could really use some commas here.

even if I did get a couple looks at her before I died.)

Gilda hadn't seen Dash's crimes first hand, and Fluttercruel HADN'T turned psychotic yet (she went through several 'upgrades.')


All the same thing, that is was just ‘how things were’ or they were ‘different’…but none of those answers worked for me.

Discord didn't magically 'compel' RD to do anything. She wasn't FORCED to do anything. She obeyed Discord because of this threats were her own choice.

Then things changed. First the sky got really REALLY weird looking! It was half day and half night! No creature knew she that was! It was kinda scary, but we still could just say ‘Meat Top Hat Discord did it’…Until something else happened…

THANK GOODNESS for not just having her think it was all pretty while everyone else panicked at it. That would have been painful to read.

(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Uh…Nothing…you’d have to be over a thousand years old to get it…Keep going.)

I don't either.

“Because they’re different!” momma said, but she looked confused.

No offense. But this reminds me of the argument strawmen use in webcomics with a political under tone.

"They weren't a sadistic monster, they didn't takes chicks and turn them into monsters, they didn't steal souls to add to their collection, they didn't obey Discord like they were a machine, they didn't kill someone, apologize, kill someone, apologize, over and over and OVER and never once actually CHANGE what they were doing!"



And she cried. That was…weird.

Actually someone pointed out, Traitor Dash crying wasn't that unusual.


“But your family is named Apple Pie, right?”

“Yep!”

“How do you tell the difference?”

GOOD LAMPSHADE HANGING!

Poison Apple chuckled. “Bad guys don’t take questions well, do they?”

Actually some LOVE to talk about themselves.
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Kendell2 Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013
"Even when she killed Storm-Cracker, I was terrified, I did try to stand up for her, but I couldn’t see Tratiro Dash as just a monster…

No offense dude but that ones a little over the top. Seeing a stranger kill a member of your pack and wanting to stand up FOR THEM?! Seriously. That's crazy. People are judged by their actions, not their words. "

Sorry, didn't make it clear she stood up for STORM-CRACKER. Edited to make it clearer what she meant and that she WAS upset about Rainbow killing her.

"(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Just I knew her…mom I think Dash said back a thousand years ago…

You could really use some commas here."

Thanks.

"even if I did get a couple looks at her before I died.)

Gilda hadn't seen Dash's crimes first hand, and Fluttercruel HADN'T turned psychotic yet (she went through several 'upgrades.')"

Yeah, I honestly wasn't sure about that personally, fixed it.


"All the same thing, that is was just ‘how things were’ or they were ‘different’…but none of those answers worked for me.

Discord didn't magically 'compel' RD to do anything. She wasn't FORCED to do anything. She obeyed Discord because of this threats were her own choice."

Inquisition addressed that by pointing out they didn't JUST treat the Discorded as victims and that Discord enjoys it MORE if he DOESN'T have to Discord his victim and can make them do it entirely of their own accord because it hurts them WORSE.

However I made it address it more and also implied Inquisition, being a child, either they dumbed it down for her or, like children DO she simplified it because it SOUNDED all the same to her.

"Then things changed. First the sky got really REALLY weird looking! It was half day and half night! No creature knew she that was! It was kinda scary, but we still could just say ‘Meat Top Hat Discord did it’…Until something else happened…

THANK GOODNESS for not just having her think it was all pretty while everyone else panicked at it. That would have been painful to read."

You're welcome. I honestly felt that wouldn't fit her character to be truthful. Part of what scared her is the others GENUINELY didn't know what it meant and neither did she. She could TELL they didn't have a good answer other than 'Discord did it' and that scared her.

"(Interviewer’s Notes (Gilda): Uh…Nothing…you’d have to be over a thousand years old to get it…Keep going.)

I don't either."

She was laughing at one of Discord's titles, something the ponies who GREW UP listening to them don't understand. To Gilda they're stupid and idiotic, to Inquisition they're just how Discord IS.

"“Because they’re different!” momma said, but she looked confused. 

No offense. But this reminds me of the argument strawmen use in webcomics with a political under tone. 

"They weren't a sadistic monster, they didn't takes chicks and turn them into monsters, they didn't steal souls to add to their collection, they didn't obey Discord like they were a machine, they didn't kill someone, apologize, kill someone, apologize, over and over and OVER and never once actually CHANGE what they were doing!""

Fixed! thanks! I HONESTLY didn't intend to make her seem like a strawman, I wanted her to be someone who's worldviews are being challenged and she doesn't know HOW to feel.

""And she cried. That was…weird.

Actually someone pointed out, Traitor Dash crying wasn't that unusual."

Added a clarification that the weird point was her crying AS MUCH and how BROKEN she looked because from what we've seen, Traitor Dash BURIES her hurt and doesn't let the ponies feel it. Thank you.


"“But your family is named Apple Pie, right?”

“Yep!”

“How do you tell the difference?”

GOOD LAMPSHADE HANGING!"

Thanks!

"Poison Apple chuckled. “Bad guys don’t take questions well, do they?”

Actually some LOVE to talk about themselves."

Good point, changed it a bit.

Thanks for the edits!

Was there anything else you liked about it?
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alexwarlorn Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013
One thing I'd have liked to see more is how Apple Pie and Inquisition are DIFFERENT. 

And I wish I could say more, I really do, but I feel so distracted lately. 
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Kendell2 Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013
Might show that one from Magica's POV since she's the observant one.

It doesn't feel like Inquisition OR Apple Pie would address the fact that they're different because they're very much both kids while Magica is The Leader and I'm making her a tad more observant (there might be an UNDERLYING reason she's trying to be).

And I understand. *Hug*
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Richforce Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013
Nice work
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Kendell2 Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013
Thanks. 

What parts did you specifically like?
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